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Post by Splasher Sun Jul 15, 2012 8:36 am

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Poem about poetry tongue

As I begin to read the poem, I lose myself in the hedges of emotion,
Like a wild protest, causing a commotion,
In my mind, the thoughts are provoked,
They’ve stopped circulating; my brain has been choked,
So I step back, take a new perspective,
Now the thoughts are collective, they can make sense,
I’ve grasped the concept, and now I know it’s not just rambling nonsense.

I'm new to writing poems, so go easy laugh

EDIT: I know this is really short, I might expand on it later smile


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Post by Splasher Sun Aug 12, 2012 12:41 pm

I will keep it this way, thanks Kate and Sonia smile
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Post by Splasher Sun Aug 12, 2012 12:45 pm

This is an old poem I never ended up posting because I'm not 100% happy with it, but here it is;

One Day ~

One day, you'll see things my way,
One day, you'll become something other than a walking cliché,
One day, you'll give it all away,
One day, you'll start to decay.

One day, my body will give up,
One day, I'll drink from the death cup,
One day, maybe one day, things will be okay,
One day, can't come further from today.
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Post by Splasher Sun Aug 12, 2012 12:49 pm

My friend told me to write a rap a while ago, here's a snippet from it:

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Because it feels like I've been waiting forever,
You'll never be mine, I should've known better,
Who am I kidding, I'll never give up,
In this never ending race for love,
You're the prize but I'm coming in last,
Look at me now, don't judge the past.
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Post by Splasher Sun Aug 12, 2012 12:51 pm

Another snippet from the rap:

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If you'd just believe in me, you'd see,
That this isn't just a fucking lost key,
We can still work, just needs some guidance,
I've tried my hardest to stop the subsidence,
But now it's your turn, remember all you've learnt,
Love's not something that can be returned,
Because this fire's nearing the end of it's burn.
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Post by Survivor of Violence Sun Aug 12, 2012 12:59 pm

these rap parts are cool (i can imagine them being rapped)

and i really enjoyed One Day. good job jesse!
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Post by ¡sonia! Mon Aug 13, 2012 9:12 am

I don't really like rap laugh
but that's still great grin
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Post by Splasher Sun Aug 19, 2012 2:54 pm

This one probably won't make sense without an explanation, but hopefully it does:

Closer ~

Will this all end before it starts?
Or is this destined in our hearts?
Every day it edges closer,
But today it's taking over.

No longer do I have control,
I've been swallowed whole,
By my little world that's crashing down,
In my confusion,  I'm starting to drown.

I'm not even sure anymore, and that's not alright,
You'll never know though, I'm too scared of your bite,
My mouth's zipped shut, yours' wide open,
Can't you see our fate's already been chosen and broken.

The last time I felt safe was the first,
But now my insecurities are at their worst,
So look into my eyes, tell me that I'm sure,
Because I know I'm not, I just need to feel secure.

And if you decide to leave, it's fine by me,
Just look back at us, and you'll see,
We were never broken, only deluded,
By our own need to be so secluded.

It started so well, what was there to run from?
It's been so long, but I still feel numb,
Now that the tears have dried,
Is it really that bad I lied?
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Post by ¡sonia! Mon Aug 20, 2012 8:40 am

I love it :')

So, what's the explanation? tongue
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Post by Survivor of Violence Mon Aug 20, 2012 4:47 pm

i wonder too laugh
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Post by Splasher Sun Sep 02, 2012 9:35 pm

This isn't a poem, and my Tumblr followers will have already seen it, but I made a parody of Prayer of the Refugee:

Prayer of the Pizza

Warm yourself by the oven, Joe,
And the pizza will come soon.
I’ll show you photos of a pizza store,
A place that we once owned.

Before we packed our boxes
And left all the cheese behind us with the sauce.
We had a place that we could call “Pizza Hut”,
And a recipe no one could touch.

Don’t eat me up now,
My taste is so profound,
I don’t need your anchovies now,
You will bite me now, now, now!

Don’t eat me up now,
My taste is so profound,
I don’t need your anchovies now,
You will bite me now, now, now!

Now!

We are the tasty and the delicious,
The cheesy, and the crust,
We are the dough that never rose,
And tomato base is a must.

But we’ve been cooking while you ate so much,
In the safety of our store.
We’ve been baking up such a great taste
That will make you moan.

Don’t eat me up now,
My taste is so profound,
I don’t need your anchovies now,
You will bite me now, now, now!

Don’t eat me up now,
My taste is so profound,
I don’t need your anchovies now,
You will bite me now, now, now!

So open your mouth Joe,
The pizza’s on its way.
Delightful scents and smells
Are guiding the way.

Keep hungry no longer,
We’ll eat through the day,
Of the pizzas that we’ve made,
And the tastebuds we’ve reclaimed.

Go!

Don’t eat me up now,
My taste is so profound,
I don’t need your anchovies now,
You will bite me now, now, now!

Don’t eat me up now,
My taste is so profound,
I don’t need your anchovies now,
You will bite me now, now, now!

Don’t eat me up…
(I don’t need your anchovies, my taste is profound,)
Don’t eat me up…
(I don’t need your anchovies)
No! No! No!
Don’t eat me up!
(I don’t need your anchovies, my taste is profound)
Don’t eat me up!
(I don’t need your anchovies, my taste is profound)
Don’t eat me up now, now, now, now, now!
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Post by Splasher Wed Sep 05, 2012 12:22 pm

Break Free

Is it wrong that it feels so good,
Knowing you're not where you stood
Last week, last month, ever since I've known you,
No one will believe me though, so I'll go with my cue,
And pretend I'm sad, miserable,
But deep down I know we were fictional.

Two characters, playing their story,
Blinded by our sense of self-found glory,
I've said it before, but no one listened,
You were the walls that kept me imprisoned,
But now, after the longest time,
I take a look around, and I can see the light.



I don't like the ending, I might end up adding another stanza


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Post by ¡sonia! Wed Sep 05, 2012 12:25 pm

Brilliant :')
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Post by Splasher Fri Sep 14, 2012 8:46 am

Sonia's poem that I edited for her:

Tell Me

I have nothing left to say,
I've yet to see a day,
Where you haven't taken the words out of my mouth,
Just to worsen my life of doubt.

Look at what you've done to me,
I wasn't suppose to be
Dependent on anybody
I was made to be with nobody.

A life for no one but me,
A life that I'll never see,
Because you stole it and broke it,
Why can't I live my life with you omit?

Every time you break my heart,
You pick up the pieces,
To put us back to the start,
When you could make me feel decent.

Tell me what you want,
Tell me what you see
In every broken piece of me.

Tell me you won't leave,
Tell me I'll never have to see,
What I was making myself be.
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Post by Splasher Fri Sep 21, 2012 5:16 pm

I haven't written an original poem for a few weeks now, so this may not be very good :P


Wouldn't Be the First Time

I stare at the window,
Looking into my empty eyes,
I've become lost in my own limbo,
A place where no one can hear my cries,
Wouldn't be the first time,
You left me in this state of mind,
Where even the strongest eyes are blind.

So help me find my way,
Back to reality,
Where I can see the light of day,
Because my life is still not complete,
Wouldn't be the first time,
You took away my life,
Pierced my heart like a knife.

I know how this ends,
I've watched it 1000 times before,
I backstab all of my friends,
Just for you to walk out that door,
Wouldn't be the first time,
I left everything behind,
Just to find out you were never mine.
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Post by ¡sonia! Sat Sep 22, 2012 5:14 am

That was... :') god, I loved it wub
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Post by Splasher Tue Sep 25, 2012 4:58 pm

Thanks Sonia grin
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Post by Splasher Wed Oct 03, 2012 6:37 pm

This one goes out to a dickhead I didn't realise I hated so much until writing this poem. Foo Fighters reference included:


"Fuck You!"

I'm so sick of you,
Sick of what you do
And the bullshit you spew,
Just so people will like you.

Yet no one else can see,
That all you want to be,
Is a cheap imitation of me,
Just so people can't see

What's really inside;
An awful lot to hide,
Behind all those cheap lies,
There's nothing to see, nothing inside.

Deep down you know,
That you're beyond shallow,
So you put on a grand show,
Just so people won't know

Who you really are;
The jerk with charisma,
Is that ever going to get you far?
Talk yourself around people who know who you are.

But now the charade is wearing loose,
And everyone can see your abuse,
I can now hang my head without your noose,
To let my spirit fly loose.
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Post by ¡sonia! Thu Oct 04, 2012 9:08 am

That was amazing!! grin
I know how you feel, I had someone in mind while reading that laugh
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Post by itslikelectiveamnesia Sat Oct 06, 2012 6:42 am

i like it :) i feel like that describes a couple people i know perfectly. fits right it with the person that i wrote about in my poem Mark Me
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Post by itslikelectiveamnesia Sat Oct 06, 2012 6:51 am

Splasher wrote:I haven't written an original poem for a few weeks now, so this may not be very good :P


Wouldn't Be the First Time

I stare at the window,
Looking into my empty eyes,
I've become lost in my own limbo,
A place where no one can hear my cries,
Wouldn't be the first time,
You left me in this state of mind,
Where even the strongest eyes are blind.

So help me find my way,
Back to reality,
Where I can see the light of day,
Because my life is still not complete,
Wouldn't be the first time,
You took away my life,
Pierced my heart like a knife.

I know how this ends,
I've watched it 1000 times before,
I backstab all of my friends,
Just for you to walk out that door,
Wouldn't be the first time,
I left everything behind,
Just to find out you were never mine.

favorite line: even the strongest eyes are blind.
really good line
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Post by itslikelectiveamnesia Sat Oct 06, 2012 7:01 am

Splasher wrote:Done I think:

I am the thin line, between death and glory,
The final chapter to a never-ending story,
I am the solution to everything bad, or am I the cause?
When you see what I’ve done, there will be no applause,
Many enter me, not all leave,
For those who don’t, I grieve,
But I’ll never stop, not in this state of the union,
After centuries, I’ve become the awkward stranger lurking at the reunion,
I am the voice on camera, pleading for an end,
To brutality, to immorality,
To travesty, to catastrophe,
I am the voice off camera, pleading for a stop,
To reality, to liberality,
To sanity, to humanity,
If I leave, which I won’t,
They’ll still be trembling, to the bone,
What’s that they hear?
Rapid fire or the highway, they can’t tell,
It’ll grow under their skin, like a defective cell,
When they can take no more, I still won’t stop,
I will keep going, day and night, nonstop.


powerful. this ones my favorite (aside from prayer of the pizza) that ive read so far. i love how it questions the "goods" and bads of war. reminds me of how tim approached hero of war
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Post by Survivor of Violence Sat Oct 06, 2012 9:57 am

good job Jesse!
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Post by Splasher Sat Oct 06, 2012 12:54 pm

Thanks for the feedback Clare, Kate and Sonia grin
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Post by Splasher Mon Oct 08, 2012 1:24 pm

We Don't Belong

Do you ever feel like you've been stepped on,
Like any sense of self-belief you once had is gone?
Do you ever feel like it's only you,
Like no one can help you pull through?

It's the days like these, that we see,
Even if we're right, we'll be wrong,
It's the days like these, that we realise ourselves to be,
The ones that don't belong.

If you've ever had a voice in your head,
Telling you to back down and surrender,
If all you've ever seen is red,
And you believe you're nothing more than a pretender...

Stand up and see,
That we can't be,
More than what we are,
The ones who don't belong.

If you've ever felt stepped on,
Like all your self-belief you once had was gone,
If you've ever felt like it's only you,
Like no one will help you pull through...

Stand up and see,
That who they think you are,
Doesn't have to make you be,
The one who covers up their scars

Because all you are,
Is a little bizarre,
It's not that we don't belong,
It's that we don't want to.

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I was a tad depressed when I began writing this and by the end I was pretty optomstic, I think the attitude change shows in the poem tongue
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Post by ¡sonia! Mon Oct 08, 2012 1:55 pm

That was so amazing :')
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Post by Splasher Wed Oct 10, 2012 1:17 pm

I had a go at a... Happy poem oh I think this is my first laugh Song references littered throughout the poem:

Only If

I hear your name,
My heart skips a beat,
I see your face,
I'm lifted from my feet.

I watch you smile,
I melt inside,
I make you laugh,
Or at least I tried.

When you're around,
Nothing seems down,
The world blossoms with an unseen sunshine,
I need someone to tell me that I'm still alive

Because looking into your eyes,
Is the closest to heaven I've ever been,
If this is what it's like after we die,
Then take me from my skin.

So I don't have to count the days you're gone,
I need this feeling reborn,
One last chance to stay,
Please don't go away,
Because you're the sunrise of my day.
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Post by Survivor of Violence Wed Oct 10, 2012 1:20 pm

awwww how sweet!
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Post by itslikelectiveamnesia Wed Oct 10, 2012 7:56 pm

aw its cute XP i like it
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Post by itslikelectiveamnesia Wed Oct 10, 2012 8:01 pm

Splasher wrote:We Don't Belong

Do you ever feel like you've been stepped on,
Like any sense of self-belief you once had is gone?
Do you ever feel like it's only you,
Like no one can help you pull through?

It's the days like these, that we see,
Even if we're right, we'll be wrong,
It's the days like these, that we realise ourselves to be,
The ones that don't belong.

If you've ever had a voice in your head,
Telling you to back down and surrender,
If all you've ever seen is red,
And you believe you're nothing more than a pretender...

Stand up and see,
That we can't be,
More than what we are,
The ones who don't belong.

If you've ever felt stepped on,
Like all your self-belief you once had was gone,
If you've ever felt like it's only you,
Like no one will help you pull through...

Stand up and see,
That who they think you are,
Doesn't have to make you be,
The one who covers up their scars

Because all you are,
Is a little bizarre,
It's not that we don't belong,
It's that we don't want to.

~~~~

I was a tad depressed when I began writing this and by the end I was pretty optomstic, I think the attitude change shows in the poem Jesse's poetry - Page 3 253468018

that happens to me a lot ^. writing helps sometimes. o and i love the message. definitely explains how i feel at times :)
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Post by ¡sonia! Thu Oct 11, 2012 9:23 am

That was so.. Happy and sweet and nice mellow
And I liked it...
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